Help me with this poem!!??

This poems sux. Not to be rude (im only rude ot ppl thats r rude to me first) but it has not structure. You stated the topic and you focus on it but, maybe you should try rhyming some of the lines, you can take some of your words and use different words that mean the same thing but rhyme with other lines. like this: line one ends with scared so find a word taht rhymes with that for line 3 or 4 then the last line also. I htink you could be quite successful with your poetry if you try rhyming. but i don't think that cigarettes is a good topic for you to write about. only write about wat you know and feel. Like love or hate or maybe ur going through or went thorugh divorce between ur parents. Write about stuff like that that you went through in ur life, that's the stuff you know.